Revision Practice - If I were writing this paper, there are...

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If I were writing this paper, there are a few changes I would make. The first change I would make is to the opening statement. Instead of saying “The Dark Knight was the most popular film of 2008.” Instead the writer should have said “In 2008 the blockbuster smash hit The Dark Knight was released.” And then go into some detail about the movie and the story in order to give the reader a little background about the film, and also add it some concrete numbers to back-up the blockbuster claim. In the 2 nd paragraph I would have tried to give more difference between the 2 newer Batman films and the previous versions that were done. Besides saying the new films were darker, I would have said the previous films were more kid oriented as opposed with the new films which give the franchise more of a real world feel and allows the audience to relate with the characters. The third paragraph in my opinion could use the most work. I like how the writer talked about the acting but could have given more detail. Like what about the
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This note was uploaded on 07/21/2011 for the course COMM 155 taught by Professor Hudson during the Spring '11 term at University of Phoenix.

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