Franklin.PersonalNarrative[1]

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Franklin 1 Emma Franklin Prof. Doersch 6 December 2010 Draft 1
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A Moment in the Sun Good title Not needed Diving unsuccessfully but still catching the Frisbee is a little contradictory cliche but end of sentence awkward “are the girls I chose” ; Repeating yourself “Looking back” and “remembering” are the same, redundant Great conclusion Shrieks of laughter fill the air as I bumble after the Frisbee once again. Not only do I not seem able to catch the blasted piece of plastic, but I am also not able to retrieve it gracefully. But for once, I don’t care. I am so ecstatically happy that it doesn’t seem to matter to me if I look like an idiot, and I can tell my friends feel the same way.
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It is so windy out here that it almost feels like there are gale force winds trying to compete with our gales of giggles. It won’t work though, our hilarity will win. The wind does make playing Frisbee hard, though, Good title Not needed Diving unsuccessfully but still catching the Frisbee is a little contradictory cliche but end of sentence awkward “are the girls I chose” ; Repeating yourself “Looking back” and “remembering” are the same, redundant Great conclusion
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and more often than not me and my two best friends are diving unsuccessfully onto the grass than catching the little elusive yellow disc.Good title Not needed Diving unsuccessfully but still catching the Frisbee is a little contradictory cliche but end of sentence awkward “are the girls I chose” ; Repeating yourself “Looking back” and “remembering” are the same, redundant Great conclusion I can hardly see straight with the wind whipping my hair and I would be a bit chilly if it weren’t for the sun beating down on me.
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