comp2week5 - T he changes that I would make to this paper...

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The changes that I would make to this paper is I would be careful on using repetitive words. In the first two sentences I got bored because he kept saying popular over and over again. That right there would make the reader not want to finish reading the paper. Another thing is the use of all those fancy words can be good, but if you use them too much your reader may not understand you and they will begin to get lost. If that is the case you may not be able to make sure the reader will continue to read it. If I was the one writing the paper, I would want to make my paragraphs longer with more information. The more information you have the easier it will be for you to provide that you have down your research. If you limit yourself to just the minimum than people may not think you actually took your time to gather information on the topic. I mean you don’t want to drag it on for hours, but just putting in that extra effort it can go a long way. The way the writer put everything together I think it could have been done a little better. When I read the
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This note was uploaded on 09/12/2011 for the course COMPOSITIO 101 taught by Professor Chumley during the Spring '11 term at Herzing.

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