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Unformatted text preview: the paper. Example; The novel written by Steve Lopez takes place in an area of Philadelphia known as the Bad Lands. The area acquired this name because. . Te essay also contains passive sentences like the opening of the second paragraph. Gabriel had gotten involved. Try to write in the affirmative. Gabriel became involved. Try sticking to the important seens in the book and explain the reason for the actions of the character. Revise and combine sentences, and write in the present when possible. Hope these suggestions help. Your essay has left me wanting to read the book for myself. Good Luck!!...
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