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Unformatted text preview: more effective CORRECTED PARAGRAPGH Paragraphs can be written effectively if the writer uses sentence variety and rhythm. Paragraphs one and four are the paragraphs that were chosen to read. I believe that paragraph four was more effective because it has a strong topic sentence and a superior use of sentence variety and rhythm. Providing a strong topic sentence informs the reader what the main point of the paragraph will be. Using sentence variety and rhythm in writing can enhance the flow of ideas leaving the reader intrigued rather than bored and uninterested. In paragraph one, the writer uses much repetition in the sentences and the flow of words tended to be choppy. Repetition can leave the reader believing that the writing lacked cleverness and was a sign of laziness. Using short, simple sentences can be a common weakness in writing. If the writer can achieve getting their point across while maintaining focus and developing a good flow throughout their. .....
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- Spring '11