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Letter numbah 2 - Hey DAnne I was really confident with my...

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Hey D’Anne, I was really confident with my original final draft when I turned it in, and was really surprised with the grade when I got it back. But looking at your comments made me see the real flaws in my essay. My writing seemed almost elementary and there was a lack of analysis in various part of my essay. I also found surface errors, like spelling and punctuation that I don’t know why I didn’t find before when I read the essay out loud. So I started paragraph by paragraph and tried to change things around. Starting with the title. You checked off that my title was not interesting and does not represent the essay. So I went back to the drawing board and tried to come up with things that would contradict so it would make the reader curious about the essay. So I came up with the title the Minority is not the Majority. I like this one better than my old one because intent is to stir up a question. Obviously the minority is not the majority so why is it being represented so much? And I felt like if I could sum up my essay in one
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