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Unformatted text preview: 第2章 如何以您独特的人生经历写出 与众不同的您 绝大多数招生委员会评委在阅读自传时甚感头痛的是:他们阅读的申请文章大都千 篇一律,无论是写自己的学术背景、工作经历、课外活动、兴趣爱好,还是个人的奋斗 目标,所用的语言和事例都相似甚至雷同。申请人都说自己对所选择的领域很有兴趣、 很有造诣、想继续深造研究以便将来更好地为全世界人民服务。招生委员会连续读了几 十篇这样如出一辙的文章后双眼昏花,很难对您的大作留下印象。您的申请也会因这篇 没有生气的自传而失去光彩。 怎样才能在文章中突出您是个有新意、有创意的人呢?怎样让招生委员会为您的个 人魅力所感染呢?这就需要您看到自己与众不同的地方,深刻挖掘在您的人生经历中的 性格品德的形成、学业事业的选择、个性能力的培养起重大作用或产生强大共鸣的个人、 家庭或社会事件事实。这些事虽然不一定“轰轰烈烈” ,但应该是您真实的经历,与您个 人密切相关并且能够显示出您的与众不同。 值得注意的是,在描绘您的独特性时,尽量不要脱离您的专业,不要为了写独特性 而放松了对专业水准和基础的强调,您应当利用自身独特的经历和背景来加强您对自己 的专业能力、潜力和志向的说明。应当注意的是,最有说服力的申请文章是那些能把个 人独特性的描绘和对专业水平的说明结合得恰到好处的文章。 根据您在第 1 章中已经整理出来的个人档案,结合下列的问题再一次挑选决定您要 让评委们知道了解您个人的素材。 2.1 独特的思想 有没有一种具体的思想观点在奋斗过程中不断地激励您?这也许是您的座右铭,或 是不会引起评委非议的个人信仰。下面这个实例讲到的是孔子的“知其不可而为之”的 思想对一位申请者在物理学领域的研究产生巨大的动力。 第 1 部分 自 传 范例 Encouraged by the words of Confucian deeply rooted in my mind about persistence in pursuing in right ways which seems unobtainable, I chose to devote myself to the exploration of the mysteries of the universe through the main field of physics. Though it seems that I am not able to reach them all, I am seeking my ways. My plan of pursuing graduate study in your doctoral program of physics in order to obtain a PhD is exactly one of the ways leading to my final aim. I am enthusiastically and tirelessly working on the applications for acceptance into your program after my expected graduation in June 2003 from the department of physics at XXXX University in China. 2.2 难忘的经历 如果有一些特别的经历,如病痛、家庭变故、特殊家庭成员关系等,对您的人生态 度产生了积极影响,不妨把它写出来。下面这个例子讲的就是幼时与病痛做斗争的经历 对一个申请人性格的磨炼产生的积极影响。 范例 Due to amblyopia I got after a high fever when I was two months old, I did not have normal eyesight for a comparatively long period of life. It was not until after a lot of advised exercises and a final surgery at an age of 12 did I experience good eyesight. Because of this experience, I realize not only how much care I received from my parents and doctors, which has led me to have a willing heart to help those in pain or in need, I also have learned about perseverance while I made up for the study that I missed. I value this life experience in molding my character. ·33· 成功留学文书写作必备 2.3 有影响力的家庭成员 家庭成员往往在一个人的成长过程中起到非常重要的作用。下面的例子讲述了担任 小学校长几十年的爷爷对申请人关心中国教育事业、愿意把教育作为专业领域的深远 影响。 范例 Since childhood I have been admiring and upholding professions in education. My grandfather was an elementary school principle for almost twenty years. His persistent hard work, high sense of responsibility for the school, and leadership made deepest impressions upon me. I regard him as an educator model. Through him,I get an idea of current public education in China, which plays the dominant role in the whole educational system where immature private educational organizations keep coming up in recent years. 家庭成员对一个人的长远影响还表现在性格和品行的塑造上。很多申请人都会提到 父母对孩子的影响。尽管很多父母文化知识水平不高,也不富裕,在社会上只是普通人 而已,但他们在教育孩子上所表现出的牺牲精神和道德水准,影响着一个人的成长和发 展。下面这个例子中申请人的母亲就是这样给他留下了根深蒂固的影响。 范例 Attributed to a wise and persevering mother, who is almost an illiterate resulting from the loss of chance to be educated in culture revolution, I was provided, as far as the limited family resources could go, a free learning and living environment from a very young age. She not only told me numerous brilliant stories, many of which enriched my imagination and are still well remembered. Also she bought me books of all levels and kinds. In an era that we did not have much information resources, investment on books could be a big part of living expenses in a family. My mother sacrificed much for herself to provide me the best possible way to learn about the outside world. Unconventional as I was as a boy in many ways, I got full development under my mother’s loving teaching and encouragement. From elementary school ·34· 第 1 部分 自 传 through high school, I had been my mother’s pride and the envy of my peers with top performance in academic aspect and other talents demonstrated in varieties of school activities. In middle school, I won the National Olympic Competition Prize in all the five required fundamental subjects of Mathematics, Chemistry, XXX, XXX, etc. The record set in that middle school is still compelling even today. 2.4 重要的偶像 如果有什么偶像对您的学业和事业的选择起过或还持续地起着激励的作用,也不妨 把它写出来。下面的实例中这位申请人对新闻报道情有独钟,其中一个重要的因素源自 于一个突发事件中的那位报导人及其风采给申请人留下的真切的楷模作用。请看他如何 把这个事件作为开头的: 范例 In great shock in 1986 I witnessed the explosion of Challenger spaceship on TV. One minute after it, a reporter in black wind jacket appeared at the spot and reported through TV what had happened. His calm and eloquence in reporting this tragic event greatly impressed me. Young as I was at that time, I imagined myself being the first person to the sites of many important events and introducing through media what I see, hear and feel there to audiences. Since then, I have been living with the dream of being a practitioner in mass media. 2.5 重大的事件 有时候您在决定学习哪个专业时不仅仅是因为您对这个专业有兴趣,还在于外部事 件的推动。下面这位申请人诚实地道出了她是如何被一个吃惊的事实触动,选择了原本 只是感兴趣的科目来作为将来为之奋斗的主要领域。 ·35· 成功留学文书写作必备 范例 The course of plant cell engineering caused me to be so interested in plant life science that I would like to have it as my future research area. At the time I was studying about it, an influential event that happened on our rural economic market caught my attention and greatly pushed my determination to pursue an advanced study on how the development of plant life science can promote the traditional agricultural techniques. China used to be a main exporter of soybean. In recent years, soybean produced in America with transformed genes entered the Chinese market for very low prices. The amount imported to China became as large as the total amount of domestic produced soybean, which changed China from the main soybean exporter to a main soybean importer. This event prompted me to ask why China can not produce high quality and quantity soybean as America does. I am encouraged to find that we can use the modern biological technology to break the natural obstacles in genetic crossover and mutation among species through cell and molecular operations on genes so as to obtain dramatic improvement in agricultural products. Through developing plant technology and it wide applications, we will also be able to meet in large part the needs of the large population so as to reduce the dependency on importing foreign products. The finding excited me and convinced me in my determination to focus on this area in the future research. 2.6 与专业相关的兴趣爱好 招生委员们也能通过您叙述的兴趣爱好来确定您是否真心热爱您的专业领域,是否 是一个生活空间广阔、精力充沛、热爱生活的人。下面这个实例中申请人要申请的专业 是历史建筑保护开发,他爱好游历和观摩各地建筑的特点对他的专业申请是非常有利的。 范例 From all that I have been experiencing academically and professionally in the broad architecture field, the part that touched me most was from my independent exploration in many internationally known historic sites in China, such as old palaces in Beijing, mysterious soldier ·36· 第 1 部分 自 传 statues in Xian, towers, bridges, mansions in almost each provincial capital city that were built in early dynasties, and many others. While being astonished at the marvelous wisdom of Chinese people represented in the architectural arts and crafts, I was also surprised at the poor protection of them. And the years’ participation in the urban renewal projects makes me realize the importance of historic preservation in the development of a city or a town. ·37· 成功留学文书写作必备 2.7 学习工作中增长的技能 您也可以采用具体的事例来说明您某些方面的能力或个性的形成过程,如通过参与 过的学校、社会活动来讲述您的组织能力,遇到的特殊事件及化解危机的过程,表达您 特别的处理人际关系的能力。下面这个实例讲述了一位申请人怎样通过担任学生记者学 习到怎样与人合作相处、共同提高。 范例 Meanwhile, I learned how to be a true team member while I acted as one of the campus correspondents. Collaborating with fellow students on interviews and reports about campus events and figures, I inevitably ran into schedule and view conflicts with them. The principle lesson I learned from these conflicts is my profound awareness of the importance to resolve them positively and timely. In addition to being as considerate as possible, I took the initiative to express my concerns and ideas frankly and asked for their understanding, advice and help. Though we did not reach consensus each time, we respect the differences of each other and tried to reach negotiate. In an atmosphere of mutual appreciation and mutual improvement, our group turned out to be a very active association on campus, and attracted more students to get involved. Such strength that a group can have, like what our reporting team had, always encourages me to be a committed team member of whatever I have chosen to join. 2.8 不寻常的受教育经历 一个人与专业相关的技能可能在很小的时候就已经开始培养了,目的就是为了所谓的 “一招鲜,吃遍天” 。如果您有这样的经历,是非常值得写出来的,因为它是一个能让申请 人比别人更有竞争力的体现。下面这个例子中作者要申请建筑专业,他从小就练习中国画, 并已经取得不错的成绩。建筑系的教授会非常欣赏这位申请人,因为良好的绘画基础和建筑 ·38· 第 1 部分 自 传 学背景以及具有东方建筑的文化背景,使这个学生有很好的潜力去进行中西建筑结合的研 究。有眼光的教授于在字里行间评估出一个人真正的水平并把他挖掘出来。 范例 It is my intuition that all the wonderful things naturally developed from a young age have led to my dream of a life long career as an architect. When I was only 4 years old, a birthday gift, a set of very common toy bricks for kids at that age, fascinated my young heart so much that I would spend hours on constructing shelters of different styles for insects I caught. The unwavering interest in painting, especially Chinese painting, began in my childhood Despite insufficient painting materials at that time, I had great fun in painting trees, flowers, houses and other objects on cement floors and walls. The learning of traditional Chinese painting inspired my deep interest in oriental culture. I can say without exaggeration that I am an excellent traditional Chinese painter with several works that are recognized with awards in the field. Due to my born sensitivity, the traditional architectural buildings in my hometown have exerted a subtle influence on me and influenced my interest in traditional architectural art. In addition, I was an active member of the mathematics club all through high school and participated in the national mathematics contest on behalf of my school. The knowledge and skills in mathematics enabled me to obtain logical thinking and reasoning abilities, which are of equal importance in my architecture study. 2.9 有创新性的科研经历 诚如前面所讲的,如果您的独特性没有与您的专业良好地结合起来的话,那么也就 失去了这个独特性的真正含义。在写研究经历和所做过的课题时,仔细写一写您是怎样 设计并完成它的,并从中阐述发挥您在此过程中的独创的地方,借此来让教授对您的创 新精神感兴趣。下面这个例子中,作者通过叙述毕业设计的完成过程来说明自己对新概 念的研究挖掘,以及针对不同的条件善于找出不同的解决方法。 范例 ·39· 成功留学文书写作必备 In November 2001, I formally began the practice phase of my master’s project. Digital Campus is the implementation platform of the project. Making use of 3D modeling, it aims at creating three parts: 3D campus architectural model, foundation information database, and a platform for database management and analysis. My original plan was to use simulating technology to establish a real-time virtual environment navigating system, in which dynamic detailed views inside buildings can be displayed under ad-hoc requests. The task requires the use of traditional geometry-based 3D technology. After detailed investigation, I found that to accomplish this, there needs to be a large collection of extra data and the existing database needs to be recreated. In view of the limitation of resources, we decided to substitute it with image-based virtual navigating technology. It relates series of camera-taken pictures based on certain algorithms that we will work out. With new functions to be added that can change visual angels and provide in depth visual changes, the visual effects will be much better than what can be provided by the 3D graphic tools that we currently have. The whole implementation plan has been approved and under processing. 2.10 卓越的成绩 如果您曾获得过与同辈人中相比称得上非常了不起的成绩或经历,不妨把它放在开 头的地方先重点着墨,然后再引出您的其他方面。下文作者曾同来自巴西、法国、土耳 其、中国等国家的建筑系学生代表参加过 2001 年夏天在德国举行的规划与城市设计研究 班,这是一个不同寻常的经历,因为并不是每一个建筑系的学生都会有这样的殊荣的。 这可以很有说服力地表现出这位申请人在建筑学上已取得的成绩。 范例 When a group of architecture students from Brazil, France, Spain, Turkey, Vietnam, and China won the first prize at the Workshops of Planning and Urban Design held at EEE city, Germany in summer 2001, I was among them. Beyond the joy and pride receiving this award, I cherish my international colleagues and our unforgettable days together where strange languages exchanged, rich ideas stormed, sensible debates heated, and loud laughers flowed. The ·40· 第 1 部分 自 传 chemistry among us was just magical. Coming from different continents with different cultures, religions, and perceptions, working toward a solution to help EEE city identify its unique personality and future path, the six of us agreed to disagree and impressed the workshop committee with our final convincing proposal – reload. By reload, we proposed to take full advantage of EEE city’s invaluable cultural and historical thickness while instilling new layers of contents to the city. Our design focused on enhancing traffic and vision connections, revitalizing public spaces, and improving facilities’ functional flexibilities to drive the maturity and development of EEE city. Without each of us contributing his or her knowledge and experiences to the fullest, our success would have been impossible. The best of each individual had been brought out. I treasure the confidence I have gained and the lessons I have learned through this experience; I cherish more of the inspirations that have grown in me ever since. 下面这个学生的独特经历在于他曾获得了 LCGSS 全球学者奖。 因此他随整个获奖团 体来到美国,参观了公司实验室,同大师级的计算机科学家面对面交谈过,并作为小组 的领导者在短时间里设计出产品并获得了优胜奖。在下面的申请文书中,尤其突出了对 这个小组参赛作品的设计过程的描述,表现出作者的专业和组织的水平。这又是一个让 教授刮目相看的申请。 范例 The LLL Company Global Science Scholar (LCGSS) Award is one of the highest honors that a Chinese college student can ever get. In 2001, there were only 108 students around the world that were granted this award, 50 of whom were from the U.S., the other 58 from 21other countries including 5 undergraduate students from China, a country with a total of more than 10,000,000 students studying in higher institutes each year. After chains of tests, I was among the last candidates competing for the five awards, with the final decision made by the China Scholarship Council (CSC) and International Institute of Education (IIE). Thanks to my strong background knowledge of Computer Science and the excellent English proficiency, I delivered an exceptional speech about the Future of the IT Industry. A burst of applause from the judges at the end of my speech declared my final success. I was offered a $5000 scholarship, the largest scholarship a college student is eligible to receive from a single award in China. Additionally, I was invited to the United States for a visit and to ·41· 成功留学文书写作必备 participate in a contest designed for the 108 LCGSSs. After sightseeing for three days in New York City, I visited LLL Company’s headquarters in Corning, New York. Although the buildings of LLL were not as mysterious as I had thought, the advanced devices and the excellent scientists very much impressed me. The speech given by the scientists gave me a clear picture of the frontline research in the IT industry. The face-to-face talk with Dr. RRR on how to find one’s own style in doing research also inspired me. The most challenging task was the contest. All 108 students were divided into four groups and each group was asked to design a “killer app” to compete for the main IT product in 2008. My design, “ES2”, a PDA-like PC with a foldable touch screen, was finally selected as the “killer app” of my group. I was also elected to be the president of the group presentation. I divided the whole job into different parts, with every member having a part to fulfill. We also prepared a short video to demonstrate the advantages of our product. With all the effort my team made, we created a perfect presentation. With the declaration from the president of LLL Company that my team had won the contest, we were so exhilarated that all members jumped up and hugged each other. That moment was so moving that it is deeply embedded in my memory as if it happened yesterday. During my visit in the U.S., I introduced the Chinese Bamboo flute to my foreign friends and showed them how to play tai chi, the essence of Chinese Kungfu, since I thought it was such a good opportunity share our different cultures and to further our mutual understanding. 2.11 撰写独特性的注意事项 在描写自己的独特性时应该注意以下几个问题: 1.写事例时不能泛泛地罗列,要围绕主题。要点必须集中,事例与重点必须密切 相关。 2.写独特性时口气要诚恳,不夸张,不自怜,不找借口。自自然然地娓娓道来。 3.在叙述与专业或个性紧密相关的事例时既要有概括性的描述,也要有摆事实讲道 理的细节描写。比如,讲到游历全国的经历时,不要只说游历了无数个地方,大大开阔 ·42· 第 1 部分 自 传 了眼界和视野等,可以具体地描述傣族人民的热情、古都的建筑文化、南方经济发展区 的特色等。 4.一个具体的独特事例不宜篇幅过长,否则容易使评委们失去耐性。 5.既然是自己写自己,通常用第一人称来写。 6.要尽可能挖掘出独特的视野标准。尽一切可能避免固定的思维模式和大众的评估 标准。 总而言之,不管您是在写生活经历、教育背景、科研成果与兴趣,还是写社交活动、 兴趣爱好,您都可以写的与众不同。关键取决于您怎样建立有创造性的视野角度。找对 了角度,选好了实例,每一个人的申请文章都可以既富有个性色彩又充满了竞争力。 ·43· ...
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