Revision Practice - Andy your paper was good but it needs a little work in order to make it better You are on track and with a little editing you

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Andy your paper was good but it needs a little work in order to make it better. You are on track and with a little editing you are sure to have a top notch paper. You start off with a fact but you do not say the source of your fact of give any information to back it up. You should also make sure that when using contractions that the sentence will still make since if you use the two words instead of the contraction. The seconded paragraph needs some work, it does not flow together. You start the seconded paragraph stating that the film it’s a continuation of Batman Begins but then you go on to a wordy sentence about the actors in the film and finishing with Heath Ledgers excellent performance in the film. You also used Wikipedia as a source most schools will not allow this I only noticed one spelling error; you put succesful instead of successful. You need to make sure that you use a spell and grammar check before submitting the paper. The conclusion needs to be beefed up a bit. The concussion need to summarize the paper
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This note was uploaded on 10/08/2011 for the course ENG 101 taught by Professor Christianfaught during the Spring '09 term at University of Phoenix.

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