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Unformatted text preview: and quotes. The quotes clearly back up your argument. You have also done a fair amount of research, which shows the reader that you know what you’re talking about. Overall, you have done a very good job on finding evidence and backing it up. Making Suggestions for Revision A) After reading over Walk’s lexicon I think you should focus on analysis and conventions. To begin, you definitely have good analysis, but I think your paper will become much stronger if you went I little deeper and added a few more lines of analysis. For example, your paragraphs have more definitions then analysis. Furthermore, your paper is mechanically sound with few or little grammar errors. One slight adjustment might be replacing some words with others. Not a serious problem, but I think it could make your paper more fluid. Overall, it is a good paper and needs few minor adjustments to make it complete....
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This document was uploaded on 10/26/2011 for the course UW 34 at GWU.
- Fall '10