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Unformatted text preview: the rest of your paper. You also have very good quotes that really help your comparisons and contrasts between Walt Whitman and Langston Hughes. Overall, some of the most important parts of your paper are well done. Making Suggestions for Revision A) After reviewing Walks lexicon I think the two elements you should focus on is thesis and analysis. First of all, you think you do have a strong thesis, but I think it would be very beneficial to spend a little time with it to make it perfect. I am making this suggestion because your sources and concrete details you use to back it up are very strong so if you were to make it a little better the paper would improve a lot. Also, you already do have a good amount of analysis in your paper; refer to the check marks I made. I think that you could add a little more just to make everything complete and that much stronger. Overall, its a good paper and you just need to make a few revisions and it will be complete....
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