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Kerynne Tejada Eng 134-24 25 October 2010 Assignment 7 5.b. This college provides more assistance to its students than most schools. PROBLEM: not specific on college REVISED: Cal Poly provides more assistance to its students than most state schools. C. During the state’s last congressional election, both candidates relied heavily on television to communicate their messages. PROBLEM: no similarities/differences made between subjects REVISED: During the state’s last congressional election, one candidate relied more on television to communicate their messages, while the other relied more on the Internet. 6. This paragraph is not really effective because it does not really compare the manager against the boss. All the person does is criticize. Instead of writing just about the boss, the author
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Unformatted text preview: should compare and contrast the two authority figures. More details on the manager should be made, while some details on the boss should be deleted. REVISED: A manager encourages creativity and treats employees courteously, while a boss discourages staff resourcefulness and views it as a threat. At the hardware store where I work, I got my bosss approval to develop a system for organizing excess stock in the storeroom. When he saw what I had done, he was furious and insisted that we continue to follow the old slap-dash system. At the old drugstore I used to work at, my manager welcomed my ideas on how to make production better and encouraged me and my co-workers to create more ways of making work an improved environment. My manager didnt make me scrap my work or go back to his eccentric system....
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