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Unformatted text preview: write about before interviewing her: how her art and her faith are interconnected. With this essay, I am really struggling with the organization/placement of the paragraphs. I feel like the sequence of paragraphs in my paper does not flow or make sense. Another aspect of this essay that I found difficult was threading that question throughout the essay; it was so easy to get off topic. If you could please take a look at these two things while you are editing that would be greatly appreciated! Also I think I tend to put in too much fluff when writing. If you have any suggestions to make this essay more clear and concise, like Stephen King advises, I would appreciate that as well! Thanks and dont be afraid to tear my essay apart because I know it needs a lot of help! Sincerely, Olivia Nixon...
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This note was uploaded on 12/05/2011 for the course ENGL 134 taught by Professor Martinelston during the Fall '08 term at Cal Poly.
- Fall '08