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Unformatted text preview: Evaluating an Introduction and a Conclusion (from Dodd, C.H. (2004). Managing business and professional communication . Boston: Pearson Education Inc.) The Introduction Original: What opinion do you have about immigration? Immigration is often misunderstood, which has led many Americans to become less hospitable and less eager to share their homeland with immigrants. This is unfortunate because legal immigration, in fact, is a positive force that continues to benefit our country today, just as it has for the past several hundred years. What are the weaknesses in this introduction? Revised: Give me your tired, your poor, your huddled masses yearning to breathe free the wretched refuse of your teeming shore. Send these, the homeless, the tempest tossed to me, I lift my lamp beside the golden door. Hopefully, most of us recognize this verse as the one inscribed on the tablet held by the Statue of Liberty. It speaks of the American ideology of a country founded as a safe haven for those less fortunate, whether for political, economic, or religious...
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