Unformatted text preview: mentioned tombs and stiff heart. It isn’t just writing up facts but there is good analysis afterwards. The paragraph with mechanical has plenty of specific details. She included the definition and explanation of mechanical in the body paragraph, which makes sense since she is going line by line. However, at the end she brings up the same argument, with the specific importance of that word. It is harder to see each specific technique in use when going stanza to stanza, and then switching for the last technique and making that a paragraph on its own. I don’t really like how the last paragraph is another argument for your thesis but then the last couple lines is more of a conclusion. It might be better structured if you had a final conclusion paragraph on its own. In general though, I think it’s a very good paper, most of the stuff I wrote is kind of nit picking really....
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- Fall '10
- Philosophical terminology, Argumentation theory, pretty clear argument