Unformatted text preview: the absence of a father, which the audience may not have noticed. The organization of the sentences needs to be improved in order to achieve a better idea of the author’s thought process. If certain sentences and ideas had been switched or better positioned, then the paper would have had a better coherency. Certain paragraphs should have been combined because they embodied similar ideas. The author expresses that it was tough elaborating on her thesis. At first, when writing my paper, I also had a hard time explaining my thesis, but I just reworked it so it would “work” for me. It’s important to challenge yourself but your thoughts have to be strong enough to follow up on....
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This note was uploaded on 01/20/2012 for the course ENGL 101 taught by Professor Butler during the Fall '08 term at South Carolina.
- Fall '08