I believe the student did an average job on writing this paper. If I was to the student I would have added smoother paragraph transitions. Paragraphs represent the basic unit of composition: one idea, one paragraph. However, to present a clear, unified train of thought to readers, you must make sure each paragraph follows the one before it and leads to the one after it through clear, logical transitions. The writer should have kept in mind that adequate transitions cannot simply be added to the essay without planning. Without a good reason for the sequence of your paragraphs, no transition will help you. Transitions can be made with particular words and phrases created for that purpose--conjunctive adverbs and transitional phrases--or they can be implied through a conceptual link. In my essay I am constantly revising my paragraph transitions. I do this by adding or removing my topic sentences and the sentence that leads into the next paragraph. A good transition serves as a bridge that takes you from one paragraph unto
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