BRADS PEER REVIEW FEATURE ARTICLE

BRADS PEER REVIEW FEATURE ARTICLE - Blanche Phlaum 11/19/09...

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Blanche Phlaum 11/19/09 Rws 305 Peer Review Brad’s Project Description Feature Article Peer Review After reading Brad’s feature article I felt that his writing style is engaging and I think that is good. It focuses on the founder of our organization and how he started community gardens. The feature article informs the audience of the success of the organization and the good work that the organization has done in the community. The feature article grabs the attention of the audience. This is done in the sentence with the statement of how Erik considers himself a regular person. It is important when doing a news article to get the reader’s attention. However, I think this sentence could be improved by saying, “Erik Trudo who describes himself as an ordinary guy that tries to do what is right is in fact no ordinary guy at all. In fact, in 2009, Erik…” I am a little confused with Brad’s information about the gardens being in Chula Vista and throughout San Diego County. We never discussed having the gardens anywhere in San Diego
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This note was uploaded on 01/23/2012 for the course BUSINESS IDS301 taught by Professor O'byrne during the Spring '09 term at San Diego State.

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