MELISSA PROJECT DESCRIPTION peer review

MELISSA PROJECT DESCRIPTION peer review - Blanche Phlaum...

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Blanche Phlaum 11/19/09 Rws 305 Peer Review Melissa’s Project Description News Update T he news update is well written and only requires a few minor changes in order to be perfect. The news update has the proper information that is required in order to be a successful project description. The news update has a proper headline, a lead that explains why the event was important, details of the main event, background information of our organization, consequences that explain the significant of the event, and comments. The headline tells readers that Seeds to Success held the grand opening of a community garden in El Cajon. I think that this heading is appropriate because it gives readers a brief description of the event. The news update provides readers with information about the status of our project. T he first paragraph discusses the most important information of opening a community garden in El Cajon ; this is a good lead. It gives details of the day our NGO opened a community garden. It
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