Causal Essay Workshop - Sijia Hao English 125 Section 99...

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Sijia Hao English 125 – Section 99 Professor Short 18 October 2010 Essay Revisions – Kevin Kononenko’s “Teen Text Messaging” I like that your essay is a topic that everyone has background experience with and excess explanation is unnecessary. As I read, I got that your focus is something along the lines of – teenagers who grow up with texting have difficulty connecting on a deeper level? Maybe make that clear somewhere in your paper, and articulate the exact causes of that too. The evidence is laid out but clearly tied to any focus… after you specify the focus that might not even be an issue. The main issue I had with it is your lack of addressing other sides of the argument. On the bottom of page 2, you talked about young people using texting and how, if they continue to use them into adulthood, it signifies a failure to be properly socialized. But what about the increasing number of adults who are also using texting nowadays? Is that bad too? If texting is bad for teens and not adults, I think you have to say why that is. Also at the top of page 4, you
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This note was uploaded on 01/25/2012 for the course ENGLISH 125 taught by Professor Decourcy during the Fall '09 term at University of Michigan.

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