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Unformatted text preview: exactly what Paulina was trying to prove. Her transitions were smooth and well thought out. Her restated thesis was much better restated than the original thesis. Microstructure: Paulinas language was clear. She could have explained the dark fairytales better and more thoroughly. Her pauses were strategically placed with no use of ums or uhs. Content Analysis: Paulinas supporting points were relevant and backed up her thesis correctly. She could have explained more to her male listeners about the self imaging topic concerning the thinning waistline of the female characters. Supporting Material: The information was recent with the idea of creating new fairy tales containing more realistic story lines. I was persuaded that we need to revamp fairy tales. More thought should have been put into the visual, like adding pictures of the dark fairy tales....
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- Spring '11