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Developing Good Business Sense 1 Welcome to WritePoint, the automated review system that recognizes errors most commonly made by university students in academic essays. The system embeds comments into your paper and suggests possible changes in grammar and style. Please evaluate each comment carefully to ensure that the suggested change is appropriate for your paper, but remember that your instructor's preferences for style and format prevail. You will also need to review your own citations and references since WritePoint capability in this area is limited. Thank you for using WritePoint. Developing Good Business Sense Nicole Mills BUS/210 02/20/2011 Hari Widjaja
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Developing Good Business Sense 2 Developing Good Business Sense Companies [Check spelling--if this is singular possessive, the spelling is "Company's"] use various operating systems to become more efficient and reduce production costs. The types of systems implemented depend on the nature of the company. This paper will discuss [Doctoral-level comment (but recommended for any collegiate writer)--Avoid anthropomorphisms (attributing human characteristics to nonhuman or inanimate objects). Consider that no paper can "discuss." Try something like "In this paper the subject to discuss is. . ."] three distinct companies: Barnes [Except in a title, do not capitalize the first word after a colon unless it begins a complete clause] and Noble, Starbucks, and Apple. These particular companies were chosen [The passive voice is a form of "be" (were) and a participle (chosen). Over-use of the passive voice can make paragraphs officious and tedious to read. Try to use the active voice most often; for example, passive voice = The paper was completed on time. Active voice = the student completed the paper on time--See Center for Writing Excellence > Tutorials & Guides > Grammar & Writing Guides > Active & passive voice] because they are all ["All" or "all of" used as an intensifier can very often be removed with no loss of meaning] industry leaders. This paper will further discuss how employees perform tasks, the nature of each operating system, operations and materials [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final ] management costs and affects, as well as [No comma before "as well as" (which means "in addition to" and is not a conjunction the equivalent of "and")] how each company has designed their operating system to give them a competitive advantage. Each company illustrated in this paper are all ["All" or "all of" used as an intensifier can very often be removed with no loss of meaning] retailers that sell a specific type of
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Developing Good Business Sense 3 product. However [Insert comma after this introductory word (or phrase)] employees perform much different tasks. For instance, the task of an employee of a Barnes and Noble store will include finding books for customers, checking stock of other locations, ordering a book that is [Wordiness: see if you can remove "that" or "that is"]
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