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Women in Psychology 1 Welcome to WritePoint, the automated review system that recognizes errors most commonly made by university students in academic essays. The system embeds comments into your paper and suggests possible changes in grammar and style. Please evaluate each comment carefully to ensure that the suggested change is appropriate for your paper, but remember that your instructor's preferences for style and format prevail. You will also need to review your own citations and references since WritePoint capability in this area is limited. NOTE: WritePoint comments are computer-generated writing and grammar suggestions inviting the consideration and analysis of the writer; they are not infallible statements of right/wrong, and they should not be used as grading elements. Also, at present, WritePoint cannot detect quotations or block-quotes, so comments in those areas should be ignored. Please see the other helpful writing resources in the Tutorials and Guides section of the Center for Writing Excellence. Thank you for using WritePoint.
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Women in Psychology 2 Women in Psychology Nicole Valenzuela PSY/310 October 24, 2011 Dr. Kate Andrews Mary Whiton Calkins (1863-1930) is well known for several great [Writing suggestion: "great" is an overworked word, too frequently seen, and too vague. It has too many meanings: huge, superior, numerous, etc. Use a more specific adjective] accomplishments and contributions to the field of [Wordiness: "the field of" adds little to sentence meaning; leave it out] psychology. She is considered [The passive voice is a form of "be" (is) and a participle (considered). Over-use of the passive voice can make paragraphs officious and
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Women in Psychology 3 tedious to read. Prefer the active voice. For example, passive voice = The paper was completed on time. Active voice = the student completed the paper on time. See Center for Writing Excellence > Tutorials & Guides > Grammar & Writing Guides > Active & passive voice] a great pioneer in memory research, was made [Passive voice ] the American Psychological Association’s first female president, as well as [No comma before "as well as" (which means "in addition to" and is not a conjunction the equivalent of "and")] being known for being [Doctoral rule (but good advice for any academic writer)--If not a noun (as in "human being"), the word "Being" is hard to imagine; it means "existing." Try to rewrite this without using "being"--with action words like "attending," "working," "living," "experiencing," simply "as"--or even removing "being" completely] denied [Passive voice ] her doctorate degree from Harvard University (Goodwin, 2008). Mary Whiton Calkins (1863-1930) Background and Education Mary Whiton Calkins, the oldest of five children, was raised [Passive voice ] in Buffalo, New York [insert comma] in the late 1800’s [Check spelling--if the preceding is a year, following the year with apostrophe-s means possessive; leave out the apostrophe before s] [Apostrophe: remove if the word is not possessive]
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This note was uploaded on 04/06/2012 for the course PSYCHOLOGY PSY 270 taught by Professor Williamgoodwin during the Spring '10 term at University of Phoenix.

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