Lecture #9 - Writing for Readability

Uncover the real subject give a stronger sense of the

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Unformatted text preview: http://clubweb.interbaun.com/~mward/gmc/gramm01.html Finding the Real Subject Identify False Subjects Example Original: It is the purpose of this report to provide an analysis of the recent problem at ABC.   Choices for the true action: “provide” or analyze.” Too wordy…   1. Identify false subjects   2. Uncover real subjects   3. Make the subjects perform the key action http://dominosbrainstorm.wordpress.com/2011/07/03/1867/ 1. Identify the false subject False subject: a word that is not the subject of the actual action, but occupies the expected subject position (e.g. “It”) Example It is the purpose of this report to provide an analysis of the recent problem at ABC. 2. Uncover the Real Subject Example Revised: This report provides an analysis of the recent problem at ABC.   “Providing” may not be the most important action   The action related to “the recent problem” is actually “analyze” Example Revised: This report analyzes the recent problem at ABC. Uncover the Real Subject   Give a stronger sense of the “who” in the subject Example Revised: Oswald Engineering has analyzed the recent problem at ABC. Example Revised: Oswald Engineering’s analysis of the recent problem at ABC reveals two probably causes of the failure: changes to the cranes made in 1984 and an inadequate maintenance schedule. Uncover the Real Subject Example Revised: Analysis of the recent problem at ABC reveals two probably causes of the failure: changes to the cranes made i...
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This note was uploaded on 04/04/2014 for the course COMM 1050 taught by Professor Jennajacobson during the Fall '13 term at UOIT.

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