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Unformatted text preview: Revised: From my experiences as a teenage parent, I learned to accept responsibility for my own life and for that of my son. 3. Focus on one central point . Limit your essay to stating and explaining one major idea. Focuses on Several Points: This college should improve its tutoring services, sponsor more activities of interest to Latino students, and speed up the registration process for students. Revised: To better represent the student population it serves, this college should sponsor more activities of interest to Latino students. 4. Offer an original perspective on your narrowed topic . If your thesis seems dull or ordinary, it probably needs more work. Search for an interesting angle on or a fresh insight about your narrowed topic by prewriting clustering, free-writing, etc. Too Ordinary: Many traffic accidents are a result of carelessness. Revised: When a driver has an accident, it can change his or her entire approach to driving....
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This note was uploaded on 04/10/2008 for the course ENGL 1106 taught by Professor Srjacobson during the Spring '08 term at Virginia Tech.
- Spring '08