Peer Review of Brandon's Paper - Gina Babinec COMM 280 Kurtz Review of Brandons Proposal I definitely thought Brandons topic is a subject that deserves

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Gina Babinec 11/22/13 COMM 280 Kurtz Review of Brandon’s Proposal I definitely thought Brandon’s topic is a subject that deserves looking into. It’s a prominent theme in today’s technologically inclined culture, and there are many research studies available to reference regarding it. Brandon’s introduction was helpful because I knew exactly what the paper was about. There was a couple things that I thought didn’t fit, though, like the fact about obesity, because the paper doesn’t bring it up again other than there. A few things also confused me, like a seemingly random insert about how aggression in videogames leads to school shootings (the school’s name that he referenced is Sandy Hook, not Sand Hoak, too). There are a lot of good ideas that just need to be slightly more cohesive and maybe even dug a bit deeper into to be totally valuable to the research topic. I was mostly clear on the subject that the paper was about, but not what Brandon wanted to research. I also thought that the paper was about aggression in videogames, not masculinity. I was wondering this because masculinity isn’t necessarily
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