Worksheet on Correcting Essays College Writing

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Unformatted text preview: Learner i Elhart [.ettmer Pmlhssor Holliday EiNUL 155 l-24792. 2i] i-‘e‘rlrttarj.r 21112 Gross Logic: An Illogical Approach to Obesity in “Food for Thought {and for Credit)” Jennifer firmman reaches For an answer to the munuy’s obesity.r epidemic. Published in The New York Times in 20133, Grossman’s plan to persuade readers into believing that instiluling a slrenger home economics program will fix these dietaryf deficiencies presents muiriple logical Fallacies. Fallacies used to construct her argument include false dilemma. slippersI slope. post hoc, Fault)r emotional appeal, fault},r use of atttl'usrity1 and begging the question. i In Grossman’s opening paragraph, she starts 1with an either-or solution to obesiq when she offers. “[l]eaehi.ng basic nutfitioeiihr‘thqle-o-dgpwreparation is a far less radical remedy than gastric bypass surgery or fast-food lawsuits" (par. 1! Her statement onlg,r gives two seenarios to fix the ime at hand. Ihis false dilecuu'na makes readers Feel the}r have to ehootse from one ofthe git-co solutions—teach home ectmcmics in schools or use one of the eve radical ideas that she presents. Grossnsau does not want readers to consider the other options because she wants to give the impression that ifher idea is not instituted that the only alternatives are the ones she provides. This logic is flawed because d1ere can be many other approaches to obesin that would not be as extreme. Grossrnan continues her misplaee logic when she offers a slippery slope fallacy. While establishing the need for a different fist to obesity early in her essay, she emphasizesl“...the sad fact that obese children enmrnonlg.r grow up to he obese adults, argues for a preventative Learner 2 Baseline- av. approach" If Grossmtm‘s claim that ubcsc chiidrcn often turn into obese adults is not backed up with any resemh. Maybe more obese chiidren mature into hcallhy adults. Readers are left to assume this is conuncn knowledge without an},r credible research to confirm The claim. Grcssman can turn this fellas}r into hard evidence by providing research that coincides with her claim. Another important premise in Grossnmn’s essay is That it‘hame economies. are imp-raved in schools Ilia: the obesity epidemic will get fixed. She points out participation in home economics has plummeted since the late lWDs. and became nfthet"1tcaa1d McDonald and {.‘ulenel Senders stepped in as the new mastitis of American food eullurcdiart-d at the same time _:._‘lhc nmnbcr of meals cunsttrncd outside the home has ducblcdiilGrossman par. 4}. Her post 1101: fallen: uses the logic matiome the interest in home economics tides} in. Americalfast food restaurants became more popular. Grcssman provides no evidence to prove the end result of her claim. Her logic is flawed because it cannot be assumed that her result will happen without proof. There is no evidence to support The claim That The demise gimme :cmomjcs. was the cause for the rise of East food restaurants therefore. there is no proof bringing back heme economics will make people eat at heme more often. "Befere vnu choke on your 3mmrie. transfer—laden Krispy Kreme,: is one example cf‘hew tirassman’s tcne begins ta scare readers into believing her logic (par. 1]. Gmssman uses a tilttltj' emotional appeal again. when she eJeitns. “[c]l:lcsity tends to invite such drastic solutions because it is so frustratingly difficult to treat” Lper. i}. Her comments app-cal to the fear cf obesity. Readers are scared into thinking because obesity is so difiietflt to treat bringing back home economics in schools is a. necessity. Grossman sways readers to believe just because they have eaten a Krispy Kreme tile).r need it: he curncemed with her Topic. This appeal To emntimt is a Learner 3 critiqu one. she counts on This omotion to persuade renders see the impedance of he: precise. but it is also a faulty use ot'Joglc. Eating a Krispy Kreme is not going to cause obesity in everyone. but Gmsaman wants readers to be scared that it will. She wanls readers To feel Lbc fear of obesity if they have eaten. onylh'tng comparable to :1 Krispy Krccmc, and she builds off that [car to make her next illogical claim. Home and: Garden 11! and The Food Network are two sources that Gross-nan presents to Rafi ' '* Thur support her argument. She fleshed-remind? when she writes, “Home and Garden T‘t'i the Food Network. and countless publications drive on topics once Taught by home cc" {Grumman par, 6}. While These sources might have infonustiort about topics taught in home economics, They are not credible sources when i1. comes to a high school education and home economics classes. some sources with real studies relating to home economics educaiion and its relation To obesity in society would give much more credibility To her argument. {.‘rrossmnn Tries to capitalize on The media's version ofhcmc economics again which She bug: The questiongj‘il-f The fi'ec market has done such a good job of picking up The slack. why bring home ec hack?” (put. 1") Grossman's faulty logic in Ihis passage is exactly what it smiles. She is begging Ihe question because she claims Thai The media‘s success with home economics is the answer to her question ofwhy home economics will be successlill in schools again. This logic is flawed again because The media’s success wiTh home ec is not proofthar an improved locus on home ec in schools will imprm-‘c the nations obesity problem. Groom presents an orgmenr full of misplaced logic. Her attempls To scare readers i.qu tollowing her are critical to her premise. Without fear, readers are not scared into Thinking cheeky could he a problem They need To deal ‘Niih. Yet. if her faulty appeal To emotion is successful, it opens The door to a plethora ofmjsploecd logic lbr The readers to buy into. A better Learner 4 home economics foundation in schools. might impact I111! DbESity rat'sT but what Grumman needs is some hard evidence offlless teachings in action. lfshe has. a sample ofthcse classes and the impact the}r have on ubssity.th1:n on: day hut" chains might be cunsidcmd. LeamerS Works C ited Grumman. Jmnifer. “Fm-d For Thought {and for Cmdit}.“ New For}: Timex. New York Times. 2 Sept. 2003. Web. [4 14m. 20”. ...
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