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Unformatted text preview: Grade: I Please see the following handouts (click on the link to view the handout). Scroll down to see your submitted work with the grader's comments. Example Character Sketch for Book Analysis ( ) Example Conflict Essay for Book Analysis ( ) Understanding Incompletes - Explanation and Instructions ( ) The character sketch and conflict essay must be submitted TOGETHER, in one document. Any time the student submits either separately, they will receive an incomplete. This assignment must be resubmitted. Additionally, see the end of the assignment for feedback on the character sketch. Daniel’s Character Traits in The Bronze Bow Everyone, even fictional characters, have their own unique traits. These traits are what makes someone special. The Bronze Bow follows a boy named Daniel who has a lot of hate for the Romans. A bronze bow was mentioned in the Bible in Psalm 18:34 in which David can bend a bow made of bronze. One of the book’s main character says that “when God strengthens us we can do something that seems impossible. Throughout the book, Daniel is shown to be very loyal, Thesis statement driven, and courageous. Answer: Does Daniel change? If so, outline this change in your introduction. should state shown Loyalty is a good consistent trait for this character a consistent trait, Loyalty is Daniel’s most dominate trait and is showed often throughout the book. He an initial trait, and a trait he adopts as a result of shows loyalty to Rosh (a leader of Zealots who openly show hate for the Romans), Joel (his his conversion. friend how is studying to be a rabbi that also hates the Romans), Malthace/Thacia (Joel’s sister), Example: "While he is consistentlyand Leah (his sister). One example is when he defends Rosh when he is called a robber and says, ______, Daniel is initially ___ “A good man…. he took me to live with him” (pg. 7). Daniel lost his mom who died from being but experiences taken in a conversion that results in out in the cold after her husband, Daniel’s father, was crucified by the Romans so he was taking him becoming _________." in by Rosh who was very impressionable on Daniel who followed him blindly and without much question. Another example is when Daniel said, “I vowed I would pay them back with my whole life” (pg. 82). This shows his loyalty to his dead parents and uncle who was also crucified with his dad and that Daniel wants to get vengeance for them. Throughout the book Daniel drifts from Rosh and his group of Zealots and officially leaves when Rosh refuses to help Daniel save Joel awkward phrasing. from Romans (pg. 199). But Daniel’s sister Leah, who is sick with “demons”, is Daniel’s biggest weakness as he is loyal to her the most which is a third example. At the end of the book Leah starts to die and it tears Daniel apart. Thacia brings Jesus to Daniel’s house and in an attempt to conversion paragraph comes later save Leah, Daniel gives up his hate for the Romans so that Jesus can heal her which he did. His determination to get the Romans out of Israel is his second most prominent trait. "driven to get rid of Romans" is not a trait. Driven, determined, strong-willed are examples of traits. This, however, is more a consistent trait Daniel has. Change this paragraph to focus on a trait Daniel initially has before he changes This paragraph needs to be rewritten. While the examples are detailed, there is not a clear connection between them and the trait. Daniel’s second trait is that he is very driven to get rid of the Romans. When his parents and uncle died, Daniel decided that he wanted to avenge them by killing and kicking the Romans out of Israel. He decided that ‘[w]hen the Romans were defeated and the last of them had gone, he would come back. He would build a good house for his grandmother and Leah, and there would be plenty to eat, and have a good life for them at last. And there would be no more giving way on the road and looking over their shoulders before they dared to whisper, but everyone would walk free” (pg. 51-52). This shows that he wanted to make a good life for Leah and his grandmother so that they and all the other Jews could live free without worrying about the Romans. Daniel seeks out Jesus to talk to him and Jesus asks him what he lives for. Daniel replies, “Just one thing. Freedom for my people. And vengeance for my father’s death.” Jesus says that those are two things which Daniel replies with “They are the same. I will strike for both hatred for the Romans does not prove Daniel is determined. at once” (pg. 223). This shows that Daniel is closely tied to the issue of the Romans running Israel and that his hatred stems from it. Throughout the book Daniel repeatedly shows and speaks of his hatred of the Romans even after Jesus said to let go of his hate to be able to have access to God’s kingdom. As stated before, Leah got very sick at the end of the book and was almost dead. Daniel sent someone to get Thacia, who was very close with Leah, because she deserved to see Leah before she died. Thacia brought Jesus with her and for him to heal Leah, Daniel knew that he needed to give up his hate for Romans. When he did, “strength and sureness, and a peace he had never imagined, flowed around him and into his mind and heart” (pg. 253). After Leah was healed, Daniel decided to following through with giving up his hatred by inviting a Roman named Marcus, who grew close to Leah and talked to her from the other side of a garden wall, in his home to see Leah before he left Israel and did not come back. This shows a new drive to follow Jesus’s teachings of the Lord and to give up his hatred and replace it with kindness. Courage is a trait Daniel has consistently. Look for a trait he adopts after his conversion. This third body paragraph should focus on how the conversion occurs, what trait he adopts as a result of that conversion, and 3 examples after the conversion that confirmed he actually did change. Since there is not much story between when Daniel converts and when the story ends, any of the actions can be fair game as examples as long as they are specific. Daniel’s third and last prominent trait is courage. When Daniel was still with Rosh, he followed Rosh’s orders without knowing why. One example is when he and Rosh’s Zealots attacked a caravan (pg. 19) and captured the biggest and strongest slave in the caravan. Daniel then volunteered to be the slave’s keeper after multiple of the Zealots said that the slave (named Samson by Rosh) could easily kill them (pg. 23). This shows a lot of courage to take care of a strong and intimidating stranger who had the power to kill him. Another example of Daniel’s courage is when he attacks two Romans to steal a catapult for Rosh (pg. 194). This shows great courage as the Romans are stronger than him and the Zealots he was with. One last example of courage is when he comes up with a plan to save Joel from Romans who captured him. Daniel came up with the plan to ambush the Romans to get Joel back (pg. 201-202). This shows that he is willing to risk everything to save his best friend from the people he hates the most. These are just a few examples of Daniel’s courage. In conclusion, Daniel has many traits, but the three main ones are loyalty, determination, and courage. Throughout the book there are many examples of each of these traits. Each of these traits show how Daniel changes throughout the book. His loyalty changes from Rosh, who he idolized, to his friends and his sister Leah. His determination changes from wanting all Romans dead or out of Israel to doing what was best for Leah. Finally, Daniel’s courage changes from stemming from wanting to impress Rosh to wanting to protect his friends. Daniel showed major character development throughout the book which mostly came from Jesus’s teachings. NOTE: The trio-color highlighting shows the grader's effort to evaluate the submission for the three traits and their corresponding examples. The directions are to write on the consistent trait first, the initial trait second, and the post-conversion last. What you did was write on conversion in the first two paragraphs, and a consistent trait in the last paragraph. In addition, while you indicated a change with two of the traits, you did not explain the causes of this change in your own words. Remember the goal of this assignment is not the summarize the plot, but to detail specific examples that reveal the trait in Daniel. Providing context is good. But do not quote large chunks of text to do so. If you wish to use direct quotes, please review pages 141 to 144 in the English 9 Course Manual. In view of these points, you will have to redo this assignment. Please review pages 130 to 131 in your English 9 Course Manual. 540-622-5529- HS English Counselor In addition, please reach out the academic counseling department with any questions or concerns. ...
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