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Being eighteen has its drawbacks. I am not allowed tobuy alcohol in the state of New Jersey. This is not amajor defeat, but to function in the social circles of adultlife, one must socially drink. Because I am still astudent, my age is overruled by my educational status.My parents, however supportive, still view me as a childin some respects because I still live in their house. Ihave not had the full responsibilities of an adult as yet,and the changes seem slow in coming.In contrast to this, the life of a child of eight or ninesometimes seems much easier. It is sometimes difficultnot to be enviable of their carefree lives. I feel thatbeing eighteen is a rich experience, in view of all of itsadvantages and disadvantages.This 20-minute writing sample is a good first draft.Despite the errors in diction and spelling, the writerobviously has control of the language: the ideas aregenerally clearly stated; they are organized; they arepertinent.The sentence structure has some variety.Theerrors in spelling are not frequent.The writer's majorweakness is in the inexact use of words.Even so, thetotal piece of writing is strong enough to justify a goodrating.Mediocre Response:The advantages of being eighteen are numerous. Firstof all, it is a time when you are no longer considered achild. The majority of eighteen year olders are headingoff to college. This is a new beginning because nolonger will people do things for you. Now you must do itfor yourself.New ideas are developed by oneself the emergence ofself-discipline and being independant are very
important.One of the best advantages is being on your own anddoing what you want to do. This includes good studyinghabits, staying in shape and enjoying the night life.I find that the disadvantages are very few. The best oneis leaving all your high-school friends behind. The samepeople you go along with for four years.Another disadvantage is unavailability of a full-timesummer job. this would help cut the high cost of collegetremendously.Finally the lack of respect for not living up to yourfullest expectations such as top honors in high schooland all-country in basketball.In closing I would like to say that being eighteen is thegreatest time of life.This sample is somewhat weaker.Some sentences arecomplete, indicating control of sentence structure, whileothers are fragments.There is some organization to theideas, but that organization is not consistent.Some ofthe statements are clear; some are murky.The sentencesare not very sophisticated in structure, but neither arethey invariably simple.The writing is definitely in themiddle range.Weak Response:If your in a family with older sisters and brothers youwill learn. The older kids get more priveleges, to go outlater, and not many questions asked of where they were.

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