In John Hollander’s “Swan and Shadow” the line breaks are not dictated by punctuation or natural sound flow, but rather are broken and aligned so that they mimic the shape of swan and it’s shadow. In this way, the poem can speak to the reader lyrically and visually about the subject matter. G. Three revisions of sound poem from E: one entirely end-stopped, one entirely enjambed,and a third with both enjambed and end-stopped linesEntirely End-Stopped:Entirely Enjambed:Their knees bend along the pew,As they sing slow melodies:Oh! Almighty OneThe rays stream through the rosy windows,And allow his love to subdue the crowd.Someone new arrives.Unannounced. Late. Heads turn.Look, and witness the love as the stranger takes a seat.They blend in, and the worship swells.Louder and louder,Fanatics shout praises through their lifted hands. A celebration. A joy!As he is risen this morn!Their knees bend along the pewAs they sing slow melodiesTo the Almighty One andThe rays streaming through the rosy windowsAllow his love to subdue the crowdSomeone new arrives, unannounced and late Heads turn: Look, and witness the loveAs the stranger takes a seatBlends in, and the worship swellsLouder and louderFanatics shout praisesThrough their lifted hands A celebration. A joyAs he is risen this mornMixture of Enjambed and End-stopped:Their knees bend along the pewAs they sing slow melodiesTo the Almighty One.
The rays streaming through the rosy windowsAllow his love to subdue the crowd.Someone new arrives-Unannounced. Late. Heads turn.Look! and witness the loveAs the stranger takes a seatBlends in, and the worship swells.Louder and louder!Fanatics shout praisesThrough their lifted hands. A celebration! A joy!As he is risen this mornThe version of the poem with a mixture of enjambed and end-stopped lines is the strongest. Some lines are empowered by having punctuation: “Late./Unannounced” (lines-80, but others are not: “Their knees bend along the pew” (line 1). Forcing punctuation, or in the case of the entirely enjambed poem, no punctuation, where it is not natural, or takes away from the meaning and overall effect of the poem weakens the piece. The more natural pauses let the words and sounds flow. H. A fifteen-minute writing exercise of your choice.7 Days, 7 Lines: Write a poem where each line/sentence is about each day of last weekThe man discussed his past mistakes, and we waited to start our break. For me, it passed without a care: we went to the gym and had a pizza to share. Some days are filled with quiet, but that one I passed not a moment in private. Savior rose on this day long ago; we enjoyed family ‘til the sun sank low. Making progress on behind work, but still having time with him to flirt. To school we returned after days off, but the “friends” did not return; they were still aloftWork for the grades, and the paycheck, too; a never ending cycle that somehow stops with you.