Their conversations are an attempt to make the reader

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depositing academic information for further use. Their conversations are an attempt to make the reader believe that most high school and college students are believers in what is lectured [The passive voice is a form of "be" (is) and a participle (lectured). Over-use of the passive voice can make paragraphs officious and tedious to read. Prefer the active voice. For example, passive voice = The paper was completed on time. Active voice = the student completed the paper on time. See Grammar & Writing Guides > Active & passive voice in doc sharing] or read through the use of our textbooks. In anything we read, it most have a reliable source for the reader to believe in the content. We all find ourselves in the same situation as we read these essays and asking ourselves the same questions. Is what I ["is what" is awkward. Try something like "...the same questions. I"] [Avoid use of the first person (I, me, my) in academic writing unless writing about a personal experience. ] learned about history true? [Writing suggestion: Unless in a quote or a title, avoid rhetorical questions in academic writing. A good idea is to provide answers, not questions] Have I wasted my time with my education? What is my purpose for learning these new ideas? Is what I’m [Write out contractions] reading ["is what" is awkward. Try something like "...these new ideas? I’m reading"] and learning now ["Now" is a difficult word. Because this is being read some time after you wrote it, "now" is ambiguous--do you mean at the time you were writing?
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Lingenfelter 3 When was that? If you mean "as of the present time" (Hawaii is now a state), you can leave out "now." If the time or date is important, fill it in. If the essay is in the past tense, instead of "now," use "then"] beneficial for my career? I would go on to say that we use what we need to us and [Grammar: A run-on sentence requires a comma before "and" (or other conjunction) linking main clauses] the rest becomes lost or used for later conversation. These four quotations at the beginning of Loewen’s essay display the same concept in Freire essay [This title could be more inspiring. Labeling it a "paper" or an "essay" is redundant (what else could it be?), and only a few words as a title are not very explanatory (or intriguing to the reader). An ideal title has between six and a dozen words ] and the way college students approach society. “It would be better not to know so many things that to know
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