Specific support for A: I must have walked miles handing out these letters trying to get sponsors getting sunburnt and hungry and tired; yet I never gave up. Another support for topic sentence B: I must have repeated the same speech to all the possible donors a thousand times, with very little luck of getting any money. Specific proof for B: In total I had 8 sponsors that covered 500 dollars of my fee. Details that prove B: This left me with 1,500 to pay on my own. Another somewhat general sentence proving topic sentence: As an underage full time student with 3 jobs, i know what hard work is. Facts that prove C: Hard Work means not getting enough sleep, having to trudge on through the day but still giving it your all. More details that prove C: But when you want something bad enough and you work for it, there is no one on this earth that can stop you. Second Body Paragraph: Hardwork means living with more than the cards you were dealt. Topic sentence (with controlling idea) supporting thesis and uses some transition device to connect it with preceding paragraph: I didn't get to be who I am because I was born this way. I wanted something I couldn't have easily so I put in more time and more effort and more of anything that anybody else.
A slightly less general sentence proving topic sentence II: Starting from the bottom and getting to the top shows more than having always initially been at the top, because then everyone can see how strong and dedicated you are to your work. Specific sentence proving A: I didn't get to be the varsity cheer captain, asb president, miss bloomington, and community leader because I just showed up and asked for it.
- Summer '13
- topic sentence, Miss Universe