Revised Gay marriage threatens the institution of marriage and the essential

Revised gay marriage threatens the institution of

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Revised: Gay marriage threatens the institution of marriage and the essential structure of the family, which is the fabric of society.Personal References: I think that society is held together by allowing individuals to live as they which, not by constricting laws.Revised: Society is held together by allowing individuals to live as they which, not by constricting laws.Diction: Choose the right words
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Students learning to use a thesaurus often use it excessively and incorrectly in their selection of words. Knowing that all synonyms do not mean the same thing -- that each synonym has a subtlenuance of meaning making it distinct from the other words -- will help you avoid random substitutions of words that merely seem to look better. Using good diction in your essay involveschoosing exactly the right word for the meaning you want. If you're unsure of a word's meaning, look it up in an online dictionaryor download a dictionary to your computer.Poor Diction: Devlin's essay predicates that a society consists of a group of people brought together by a common set of morals and assurances.Better Diction: Devlin's essay asserts that a society consists of a group of people brought together by a common set of morals and beliefs.Poor Diction: Hart responds that Devlin's essay is nothing more than a babble and malentendu of what a society is.Better Diction: Hart responds that Devlin's essay is nothing more than a confusion and misunderstanding of what a society is.Vary your sentence length"Choppiness" is the effect of multiple short sentences in a row giving a sense of breathlessness and childlike simplicity. Contrastingly, the opposite -- multiple, successive elongated sentences one after another -- gives a sense of never-ending lung power and pompous sophistication. A short sentence can be a good option for the content you're writing, just as a long one can as well. The key is to mix them up so that you have some short sentences and some long alternating with each other. This variety will give rhythm to your prose.Choppy sentences: John turned on the computer. He opened Framemaker. He selected a new document. The document was blank. He opened the graphics panel. He chose the shape tool. It was a polygon. He filled the polygon with red shading. He put a black border on it. It was a nice day. His mother brought him sandwiches. The sandwiches tasted good. (Holy Smokes! I could not take more than about half a page of this before I would go crazy!)Over-elongated sentences: Turning on the computer, John opened Framemaker and, after selecting a blank document and opening the graphics panel, chose a polygonal shape tool which he filled with red shading and a black border while his mother brought him sandwiches, all of which contributed to him having a nice day. Then, deliberating between a black and white or a color layout, John decided that for a publication that would be on the web as well as in print, he would need to create both types of
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