changes. I have changed the thesis statement into a more direct and persuasive one and
have averted from mentioning the name of only one author whose article has been
commented on. And this is because; in my essay I have cited arguments of more than one
author for the purpose of providing evidences. I have made this change in the rough draft
because previously my thesis statement was incomplete because it was not coherent with
the discussion in the body.
2.
How did a suggested revision from a peer, tutor, or anyone else help strengthen your
paper? If you chose not
to incorporate feedback into your essay, explain why. If, for some
reason, you did not receive feedback from someone else, why is feedback from others a
necessary step in the writing process?
(100 words minimum)
Feedback from others are an essential step in the writing process. Since I was not able to
submit my essay draft on time, I asked a friend to read my writing and provide me with
feedback.
Feedback in the form of peers’ suggestion can surely strengthen your writing. I


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