Revision is when a writer looks for major rewriting and for organizational

Revision is when a writer looks for major rewriting

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One way to improve sentence variety is to take a sentence and see how many ways it can be rewritten.Revision is when a writer looks for major rewriting and for organizational problems.Rewritten:
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3/1/2019Writing with Purpose8/16 1. During revision, a writer looks for major rewriting and for organizational problems. 2. When a writer looks for major rewriting and for organizational problems, this is known as revision. 3. Major rewriting and correcting organizational problems happens during the revision process. Exercise 4 See how many ways you can rewrite the sentences below: 1. An effective thesis statement often has the following elements: it appears at the end of the introduction, it is argumentative, and it avoids first person. 2. When revising an essay, make sure that each body paragraph has a topic sentence, arguments, and support. 3. Organize your essay effectively. Write an introduction, body, and conclusion. Have support and arguments in the body paragraphs. Rewrite for smooth flow. Answers to Exercise 4 Tone and Style Tone is the way the text sounds as it is read, often with an emotional charge to it or with an academic, formal voice. When revising for tone and style, a writer should look for instances of inappropriate tone or tone that may come across the wrong way to the reader, especially with passionate or emotionally-charged topics. Figure 4.4. Genre-Specific Tone Genre-Specific Tone Genre Type Incorrect Tone Reason Correct Tone Rhetorical Analysis Martin Luther King Jr.’s speech, I Have a Dream, was emotional and powerful. Statement discusses pathos but fails to be specific about how the speech was emotional and powerful. Martin Luther King Jr. in his speech, I Have a Dream, used emotion that Americans of all races could relate to, and he used logic to appeal to those who may not have been moved by emotion. Review Batman Returns is a horrible movie. Statement is overly negative, a generalization, and unspecific. Batman Returns lacks effective acting, editing, and plot; therefore, it is not a strong movie Commentary Terrorism is an awful, horrible thing and needs to be stopped before more people die. Adjectives describing the trend are general and extreme, and the statement is not specific enough. Terrorist acts against Western countries have risen sharply in the past decade, and world leaders will have to come together to come up with effective solutions. Style is a writer’s voice that sets him or her apart from other writers. It involves a variety of elements such as word choice, tone, and sentence variety. It must fit the genre context, audience, and purpose. When revising for style, look for strong word choice and sentence writing based on the genre.
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3/1/2019 Writing with Purpose 9/16 Exercise 5 Rewrite the following sentences to adjust for a proper academic tone: 1. Commercials using women as sex objects are frying people’s brains.
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