Steven McCommon The Cheetah Joke by lleana Morales What Works: Thoroughly enjoyed this story
The shortness of the piece of added to its overall purpose.
Writing was strong throughout the piece. Great attention to detail like the can
Steven McCommon Cienjuicious by Sebastian Ospina What Works: This story describes particularly realistic events in a surreal undertone. Your imagery is poetic flows well.
Understood the ambiguity you put around the protagonist with his unique description
Steven McCommon Livestrong, Live-not-so-strong by Amanda Adams What Works: I enjoyed your attention to detail even with the darker truths portrayed in the protagonist Anna
Felt the pathos you added within descriptions such as the stenches of dirty Pampers
S teven McCommon 1/26/2010 Anything but Silence by Roy Mar tina
I thoroughly enjoyed this piece of fiction which took the realistic aspect of jealous murder and portrayed it surrealistically, through the eyes of a young boy. The plot flows nicely, with th
Steven McCommon All Play, All Work by Max Weissler What Works: I got a sense of the exotic locations in the piece through your use of descriptive imagery. Your attention to detail put the reader into the setting of your story.
Beginning and Ending were st
Steven McCommon CRW 1101: Fiction Writing Section 1650 Monday, periods E1-E3 It is often advantageous for authors to exploit human emotions in order to elicit a specific response from the reader. This appeal to pathos relates to external shock according t
Steven McCommon CRW 1101: Fiction Writing Section 1650 Monday, periods E1-E3 In his observance of human nature, Franz Kafka comments that the first sign of the beginning of understanding is the wish to die. This existential epiphany marks the theme of one
Common Writing Errors in Fiction
When you proofread, keep this next to you.
What to do with two whole sentences
1. Have two separate sentences. I was eating my zucchini with great zeal. I don't know why. No one cares about me. I'm moving out. She's dated