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As if there weren't enough distractions to driving in our daily lives, technologies like cellphones and hands-free devices add more of a distraction to everyone's driving every day. Driving distracted is rapidly becoming an epidemic world-wide. As technology advance, drivers all around the world are becoming more dependent on these technologies to communicate. Research over the past couple of decades show cellphone usage as a significant contributor to driving accidents and deaths nationwide. According to the U.S Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, each day in the united states alone, there are more than 9 deaths and more than 1,000 injured in crashes that involve distracted drivers. Some studies also indicate that using hands-free phones is not significantly safer than hand-held phones. Some people just can't weigh the balance of being safe on the road and their need to communicate. By using hands-free devices, texting while driving, and the apparent inadequacy of laws today about using these devices while driving, the roads just aren't as safe as they could be and need to be dealt with. Although some people may be able to multi task by using a cell phone while driving, the majority of drivers can't and cell phones and hands-free devices should be banned world-wide to take minimize the distractions of driving.
Many people believe that by using hands free devices while driving is safer than using a regular cellphone, but the reality of it all is that using hands free devices while driving can be just as distracting according to some news and research reports. According to Peter Kissinger, president and CEO of the AAA Foundation for Traffic Safety, "Hands-free is not risk-free, even though three out of four motorists believe it is." He continues to say, "We know now that devices like voice-detect and voice-to-email systems can create substantial mental distractions, which can lead to degradation of driving performance." Research pointing to cognitive distraction being a road safety concern has been accumulated showing a connection between the use of hands-free or speech-based devices and driver distraction. The Insurance Institute for Highway Safety reported that when drivers use a cell phone or even hands-free devices while driving, that there is four times the chance of a car accident bad enough to require medical attention. Although hands-free devices take away some of the distractions of a hand hell phone, Rebecca Naumann, an epidemiologist at the CDC's Injury Center, also agrees that there are still mental distractions from using hands free devices that cannot be avoided. She reports that, '"You still have the distraction that your mind is taken off of the driving." And states, "Anything that takes your hands off the wheel or your mind off the road poses a risk to safety." If we like it or not, hands free devices should be banned, because safety on the road should be everyone's priority.
Another factor that is playing a major role in distracted driving is text messaging. In 2013 it was estimated that 6-16% of car crashes in the United States were due to text messaging. As records indicating the dangers of text messaging whilst driving are complied, the American Automobile Association reports that the risk of an automobile accident will increase 50% when a driver is text messaging, in which a Harvard report justified this claim when it stated that 570,000 car accidents are cause by people driving using a cellphone. This resulting in 2,600 deaths. Some reports suggest that using a cell phone while driving impairs drivers' reactions as much as having a blood alcohol level at or above the legal limit of .08%. It has additionally been reported that when texting while driving there is slowed reaction time, increased stopping distance after braking, and reduced vehicle control. It seems that even though a lot of people are aware of these factors, they continue to text while driving. The primary behavioral and cognitive processes of texting while driving remain unknown, even though preceding studies have made progress in identifying psychological predictors for texting while driving.
Lastly, Laws in the United States to regulate the use of mobile phones and other electronics by motorists is inadequate at best. Different states take different methods when it comes to these laws. Some laws only affect less experienced drivers or commercial drivers, while some laws affect every driver. Some laws target handheld devices only, while other laws affect both handheld and handsfree devices. These laws are subject or primary and secondary enforcement. According to GHSA 16 states including D.C., Puerto Rico, Guam and the U.S. Virgin Islands prohibit all drivers from using hand-held cell phones while driving. Where all are primary enforcement laws in which an officer may cite a driver for the use of a hand-held cell phone without any other traffic offense occurrence. There are currently 47 states, D.C, Puerto Rico, and the U.S. Virgin Islands that have banned texting for all drivers. There isn't a single state that bans the use of all cellphone usage while driving period, but there are 38 states and D.C that prohibit all cellphone use by beginner drivers. In order to improve everyone's safety on the road, current laws need to be changed to ban the use of cellphone and hands-free devices all together.
In Short, I have found that with all the overwhelming evidence backed up by research and reports that distracted driving is an important issue that needs to be handled. Not just by our government, but as people, as a whole. Research and studies have shown that even though people are well aware of the dangers of distracted driving while using a cellphone and other hands-free devices, that there are possibilities of them choosing to use them anyway while driving. Having this attitude will not fix this growing epidemic and needs to be changed. Since there is not just one simple solution to these challenges, peoples' self-awareness and changing current laws to ban the use of all cellphone and hands-free devices, whether it's a simple phone call or a quick text message, will help to reduce the percentage of distractions while driving.
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