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I have always been an admirer of California Lutheran University because of its location and its beautiful campus. I am from Thousand Oaks and there is no city like it. In high school I visited the campus several times and also applied and was accepted but I decided to join the United States Army to serve for the country. Since I joined the military I have visited many states and overseas but more I travel more I realize that there is no city beautiful as Thousand Oaks. Also the campus was beautiful and small size class room will best fit me providing more guidance and interaction from the professor. I will continue to serve for the nation and this education opportunity will allow me to have greater influence in the Army.
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