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The American dream is that people can live a happy life which can be achieve my hard work and being successful. It also means to have the freedom to choose what will make up happy and what life we want to live. My American dream includes obtaining my master's degree, having a good paying job in the graphic design/computer gaming field. Another part of my American dream is to have a family and home to spend time with. The American dream is that hard work helps you have a successful life and for me that means completing my degree, working in a fulfilling job, and home with my happy family.
There are some obstacles that I my face in getting to my American dream that includes dealing with my dyslexia, getting to comfortable as a graphic designer with my current job and the future of the economy. I struggle with school work due to my dyslexia and not obtaining the grades that I will need to get into my desire college that I would like to attend. The other obstacle is that I am currently working as a graphic designer and may get focused on my job which can cause me to get off track on going to college. The future of the governments economy is an obstacle that I will have to face for getting loans for school, the debt I will have to pay back and the income that I will be able to make in a few years.
There are some things that I can adjust in my life to make sure that I can make my American dream be a reality for me. The one thing I need to focus on is to continue my education and to use the tools that I have to help me do well in school and not use my dyslexia as an excuse. I also cannot let my current job get in the way of finishing school either. I know it is easy to do, but with having a degree I will be able to get a better job that will also come with a higher income level. This will help me later in life when I am ready to buy a home and start a family of my own.
In conclusion, the American dream is having the freedom to do what we desire and what makes us happy. The American dream is something that every person can experience and may not be the same dream for us. To make my American dream come true I have to work hard in school and overcome any obstacles that I may face. To stay focus and not get caught up in my current job which will help me get what I want in my life as well as to achieve and live my dream.