Paragraph Rescue and Vivid Scene Development This assignment has...

Paragraph Rescue and Vivid Scene Development

This assignment has two parts:

1. A paragraph “rescue” for which you will employ the Paramedic Method andother critical review skills you have learned this week

2. A vivid scene development which will require of you to employ your “showing”skills with rich sensory description.

The Rescue Paragraph assignment should take you no more than a paragraph to complete and the Vivid Scene Development no more than one page.

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Paragraph Rescue and Vivid Scene Development
This assignment has two parts:
1. A paragraph “rescue” for which you will employ the Paramedic Method and
other critical review skills you have learned this week
2. A vivid scene development which will require of you to employ your “showing”
skills with rich sensory description.
The Rescue Paragraph assignment should take you no more than a paragraph to
complete and the Vivid Scene Development no more than one page.
NOTE: Submit both of your assignments as one Word document.
Part I: The Rescue Paragraph
So far we’ve studied writing with an eye for pacing, active vs. passive voice, eliminating
deadwood, and for reducing abundant prepositional words and phrases. The
paragraph posted below is in dire need of your help. With the four writing tips firmly
in mind, dig into this paragraph and fix it up.

You may change punctuation and eliminate or add words to establish strong
pace.

Discover passive forms and change them to active voice.
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And use the Paramedic Method to highlight unnecessarily stacked prepositions
and other items of clutter.
Subject Paragraph
It was already getting kind of dark when James was picked up by his dad in his truck
for the ride home to his house. James turned in his seat and looked at his dad in the
dim light of the dashboard for a feel of his mood. James didn’t care for what he saw
because he took his dad’s rigid jaw to be a sign of tension probably because of another
bad day at his dad’s job. James knew his dad was hated by his boss because of that
time at the party. James wondered how his dad’s day had been and if he would read
to him from his story book tonight or if his dad would just take the newspaper into his
bedroom straight from the table and want to be by himself. James didn’t know but he
made up his mind to be extra helpful for his mom in case his dad was sad so she
wouldn’t cry again tonight.
Part II: Vivid Scene Development
We've had a lot on our plates concerning showing versus telling. Let’s go ahead and
put some of this new knowledge into use. I’m going to provide below, in summary, a
slice of life description that I want you to turn into scene. Your job is to turn my dull
commentary into a rich, vivid scene where you use a little dialogue to build characters.
The following anecdote occurred at a wedding an undergraduate student attended
several years ago (he hadn’t yet learned the art of “showing” rather than “ telling”).