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Need help! I need some one to read the topic Proposal essays (3) there are 3 and after each provide feedback to certain questions(the questions will be provided Below) I will attach each Proposal ...

provide the feedback to answer the 7 questions on each document please

Topic Proposal Peer Review
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This week we will once more focus on peer review. This time you will be reviewing Topic Proposal Essay drafts. Before I get to the directions for this peer review, here are a few reminders regarding peer reviews in general:

Always be respectful in your comments.
Respond as a reader, not a judge.
You as the reader are capable of giving critical but constructive feedback. Do not be shy about saying that aspects of the draft need work.
Read each paper more than once.
Now, for this peer review, you will be focusing on providing feedback based on the evaluation criteria presented in the grading rubric that accompanies the assignment (attached above). You will respond to each of the following questions with complete sentences, thoughtful commentary, and specific advice for improvement/revision. Respond to these questions at the bottom of the draft within the Word document. Also make note of any issues or well-done sections in the text itself using Comments or Track Changes in the Review Tab.

1. Is the research question focused, challenging, and grounded? Explain why or why not.

2. Is the proposed topic relevant, arguable (not fact, opinion, or faith based), specific and appropriate? Explain why or why not.

3. Does the introduction explain why the topic was selected and present the research question as the final sentence? Explain why or why not.

4. Do the body paragraphs discuss a plan for approaching the research question, including explanation of why it is significant to the research question and where the information may be found? Explain why or why not.

5. Does the conclusion explain the significance of the proposed topic and research question? Explain why or why not.

6. Is the draft in MLA format? Explain why or why not.

7. Are sentences complete and varied and structure? Are there any run-ons or sentence fragments? Explain why or why not.

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Dye-Pellisson 1 Dena Dye-Pellisson Dr. Shandi Wagner Freshman Writing II: English 105 Online September 16,2016 Topic Proposal Essay Are vaccines safe or are they putting ourselves and our children in the way of danger? I have often wondered this very question and upon the arrival of one of my closest cousins baby and her choice to not vaccinate him, it really made me question the system and why we follow it. Another instance that made me question this is when my own daughter had to get her chicken pox shot, which was required to go to kindergarten, and actually got the chicken pox from it. We were told there was no way that she got this from the shot but she wasn't around anyone that had chicken pox at that time. This made me contemplate that maybe this wasn't the only vaccine that could cause someone to contract the actual disease that you are trying to prevent. Another example is the flu shot, I have tried to get it on three different occasions and have contracted the flu each time. I have opted to just risk getting the flu on my own instead of from a shot. I truly never thought of vaccines as an issue before because I was brought up to just get them and never associated them with potential danger for my life or my children. I didn't even know that you had the option to not receive them, always follow the global directions and don't ask questions was the mantra. The questions that run through my mind are what are the risks associated with getting vaccinated and what can happen if people chose to not get them. To this day and age there are so many things that our bodies have built immunities to, could the diseases Dye-Pellisson 2 from the past come back in mutated forms ? Can the government really control if you don't get them so that you can't enroll in school? My plan of attack on the research for this topic is still in the beginning stages but, I plan to research the standards of how many vaccines there are and what states require them for entry to school. Included in this research, I would like to understand when and how the vaccines themselves came about. Another topic I think would be beneficial in coming to a conclusion for this subject would be to find out all the risks associated with receiving vaccinations. I believe most of the information for this subject can be found online through the CDC's website or any health organizations website. I also would like to get other people's opinion of the issue to get a good idea if people truly think you should get immunized and why and maybe collect the experience of a family who didn't follow the protocol and had to struggle with the consequences. I still haven't decided if I am truly for or against vaccinations but, I intend to get a clear understanding of all the pros and cons in regards to this subject. I truly feel that this subject is worth researching to give others and myself a better understanding of vaccinations in today's society. To have all the data to be able to make a good choice in future family members lives.

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Topic Proposal Essay Michael Hoffarth ENG 105-304 18 September 2016 Question: Is vehicle automation moving too quickly? I selected vehicle automation as a topic because I currently drive a car with several automatic features and will most likely be one of the first to have a driverless car when they are produced. I also selected this topic because my current vehicle has several automatic features that work daily with zero issues or fails. However, I have experienced occasions that would have been deadly in a driverless car because road or weather conditions caused the safety features to fail. The personal experience I have with vehicle automation is from my 2013 Ford Fusion which is equipped with Adaptive Cruise Control. Adaptive Cruise Control is a safety and convenience feature which works by automatically changing your vehicle's speed so that the vehicle will match the speed of the vehicle in its sensor range; and the vehicle will either speed up, slow down, or even apply the brake to maintain a selected distance. Ford also placed other vehicle automation features in the car such as lane assist which will automatically correct the vehicle's steering to keep between the middle line and the road's edge, automatic headlights and wipers, blind spot warning which alerts the driver to other vehicles along the side of the car and emergency brake assist which primes the braking system and alerts the driver with both sound and a red light if the sensor indicate a pending crash. Many other auto manufacturing companies are now offering other automated safety features to compete with Ford; and some technology companies like Uber and google have plans to release driverless cars in the near future. Some people believe that these companies are placing the public in danger by releasing this technology too fast, others will never trust a fully driverless car. Is the public ready for driverless cars or is vehicle automation moving too quickly. For my research project I would use scholarly papers that detail how vehicle automation works; what testing standards are used to certify automation technology and what, if any, regulations are being presented to regulate this industry. I will find these papers through the use of search engines, local library sources, and ISU scholarly resources. I do have unique person experiences with Adaptive Cruise Control that maybe used as customer testimony and what emotions are felt to fully trust the technology to slow or sometimes even brake the vehicle. I bring up this fact because my wife refuses to allow the Adaptive Cruise control to slow or brake the vehicle while I hardly ever have my foot on the gas or brake while driving with the technology active. But I haven't decided on how I would present some of the more emotional evidence on whether the public will accept the new technology or not. Some in the car industry believe that driverless cars will be required by federal law as soon as 2020. Some believe taxi and services like Uber will be completely driverless in a few years. Google, Tesla, Audi, and other technology and car manufactures are developing and deploying a wide variety of vehicle automated features will little to no deadly encounters. I will present in my report the recent deaths associated with Telsa's autopilot feature and rather experts believe they are technology failures or caused by human error. Since I work with both computer hardware and software I am aware of the problems that can happen with complex computer systems and will report on how system errors may lead to deadly accidents. A concern I will write on is what will happen if a car is hacked or worst if it malfunctions; and what safety features are installed in the vehicle to mitigate those issues. I will write about the need of consumers to get back those lost hours waiting in traffic and driving to work; and as a driver who spends over an hour a day on the road I would be interested in not having to drive that entire distance and would like to take that lost time and catch up on a TV shows or catch some sleep in the morning. As automatic technology is released there is always public hesitation to adopt the new technology. This hesitation is sometimes based on irrational fears and sometimes the hesitation is due based on the unwillingness to change. This topic is important to the class because of the likelihood of driverless cars being available for general public use within the next five to ten years. This topic is also important because the technology has the potential to save hundreds of thousands of lives by removing the human element of driving and saving millions of dollars in health care and legal costs associated with car accidents and DUI arrests.

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Heather Herron Dr. Wagner September 18, 2016 Topic Essay The rights to free speech in our country also gives us the ongoing stream of individualized opinions. Many feel that capital punishment is cruel and unnecessary punishment, whereas others feel it is justified for the actions that the prisoner has done. We have many opinions and facts that are used to persuade us as to what we should feel or think in regards to this subject. Often times we find ourselves engulfed in the opinions rather than facts of capital punishment. If given several opinions and facts about capital punishment, would you agree or disagree with the decision of death? Safety is said to be one of the biggest topics of Capital punishment. When placing a prisoner into the system for having committed such horrible crimes we have to consider the threat to guards and other inmates. There is a chance this person may cause harm to others. With such an intense environment as prison, the possibility is often higher that the prisoner may react to not only their stress of having been sentenced but also being surrounded by many others who are just as angry to be in prison. For the safety of others it is often felt that death may be the better alternative. Extreme punishment, one could say that it would be more severe to live a life in prison. Whereas others may believe that death may be the most severe. Depending upon the severity of the crime people often times change their opinions on whether to choose death or a lifetime prison sentence for someone. Ultimately it would come down the prisoner them self as to which would be more severe. One may feel that being locked up for a lifetime, unable to live in the outside world, losing all rights to decisions such as when and if they shower, eat, and sleep, is more severe than having been placed on death row. Whereas the prisoner on death row may feel that being able to live his/her life at all, would be a gift rather than a punishment. Violating human rights, this again is a matter of opinion. There is no proven fact as to whether or not the government system is violating human rights by deciding who is to live or die after having committed a severe crime. it is often said that the government and jury are playing god by placing someone in death row. However, we could also look at this as the criminal having played god as well when they decided to take an innocent person's life. Some groups have been heard to say that murder is considered a natural way of death. Therefore leading them to believe that it is not violating human rights at all. Vengeance is often times another matter that many speak of. The reasoning given for this concern is the judge and/or jury may be playing off of their emotions rather than the facts of the crime. They may feel emotional towards the family left behind to mourn the death of whomever the criminal murdered. The justifications of the judge's decision is often times questioned and deemed as having been made based upon revenge. Again, leading us back to the opinion of the judge playing god or not. Finally, many facts and opinions are given regarding this topic. It touches home with a large population of people as our prison system is largely populated and continues to become more and more full with each day. Given the opinions and facts what side would one place them self on? It often times is hard to be placed on just one side considering each side has such strong arguments and both are ultimately concerned with the what is right for human beings inside and outside of the prison walls.

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